tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post115853768459651309..comments2023-06-09T03:41:28.042-07:00Comments on chatoyance: Refugee started it with his poemLori Witzelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04744273435691506484noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158612515140985722006-09-18T13:48:00.000-07:002006-09-18T13:48:00.000-07:00Lori, this is marvelous. I love the internal rhyme...Lori, this is marvelous. I love the internal rhymes you made as much as the end rhymes. A form is a tool, nothing more, and diverts the poem when it becomes the endpoint. That said, it can be a vehicle for beautiful elegance. I admire what you've found through this one very much.MBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14515233228776181123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158589917984697962006-09-18T07:31:00.000-07:002006-09-18T07:31:00.000-07:00There is form there and according to Moshev's Rule...There is form there and according to Moshev's Rules of Poetry, Jogging and Perrier Water with Lime, there's nothing that prevents one from developing one's own form. <BR/><BR/>With regard to end-word rhyming, in my case it's probably the result of some errant brain synapse that could have just as well led me to put on a dress and rob convenience stores as write a poem.<BR/><BR/>As to villanelles and sonnets, if the student who is sketching a fork may counsel the teacher who recommended the fork, try quatrains. <BR/><BR/>I've done a number of villanelles and sonnets (will post examples later), but the most challenging of all is a sestina.<BR/><BR/>Perhaps I wasn't as clear as I might have been regarding form in a post. I might have suggested that much of what one sees in what passes for poetry around the world of blogs is lacks thought as well and reflects of a diary entry than anything else.refugee from reasonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13764323487070601177noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158588153891422742006-09-18T07:02:00.000-07:002006-09-18T07:02:00.000-07:00Oops -- Laura, sorry I double-comment-posted you!S...Oops -- Laura, sorry I double-comment-posted you!<BR/><BR/>Since Refugee's post was all about rhyme (and since I am end-line rhyme-shy) I just made up a form to suit the content. Too scared of villanelles and sonnets to try. Wanted something with a reflection-structure in it.<BR/><BR/>Maybe it is a real form, but haven't researched it yet. Perhaps one of my writer-commentators would know?<BR/><BR/>:-)Lori Witzelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04744273435691506484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158583560945380402006-09-18T05:46:00.000-07:002006-09-18T05:46:00.000-07:00Anybody who rhymes poseidon and brawn is brilliant...Anybody who rhymes poseidon and brawn is brilliant, indeed. And orreries and stories----wow! You ARE brilliant. Amazing poem---I didn't take the time to work out the exact rhyme scheme---does this form have a name?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158583534868235652006-09-18T05:45:00.000-07:002006-09-18T05:45:00.000-07:00Anybody who rhymes poseidon and brawn is brilliant...Anybody who rhymes poseidon and brawn is brilliant, indeed. And orreries and stories----wow! You ARE brilliant. Amazing poem---I didn't take the time to work out the exact rhyme scheme---does this form have a name?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158575118680562182006-09-18T03:25:00.000-07:002006-09-18T03:25:00.000-07:00Brilliant, Lori! :-DBrilliant, Lori! :-DMisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14500730996132041193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19290845.post-1158557729183538702006-09-17T22:35:00.000-07:002006-09-17T22:35:00.000-07:00This is quite lovely, well-formed, almost uniquely...This is quite lovely, well-formed, almost uniquely so. I especially liked "...altars like orreries <BR/>set around her."<BR/><BR/>And thank you letting me be at least a modest inspiration.<BR/><BR/>On the other hand, I'm a more than a bit jealous, as I'm still struggling with this damned fork.refugee from reasonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13764323487070601177noreply@blogger.com